Re: [Pkg-freevo-maint] Bug#534415: [BTS#534415] templates://freevo/{freevo.templates}
Justin B Rye ha scritto:
A Mennucc wrote:
Description: home theater framework - binaries
Freevo is a complete home theater framework. It comprises a
Personal Video Recorder system for saving television
input to disk and playing it back. It can browse and play
pictures, music, games, and movies, both
from the internal hard disk or from CDs and DVDs.
It can be used either to build a dedicated home theater with a TV
(plus remote) or on a regular desktop computer using
the monitor, the mouse and keyboard.
What do you think?
I have to get rid of that "comprise",
why? the usage of "comprise" is "the whole comprises the parts".
http://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/comprise
So that "comprise" is exact.
and the phrasing of that last
sentence seems to imply that you can use it without involving any
hardware running Debian. How about phrasing the boilerplate as:
Freevo is a complete home theater framework. It can operate as a
Personal Video Recorder system for saving television input to disk, but
can also browse and play pictures, music, games, and movies either from
the hard disk or from CDs and DVDs. Freevo can be used on a regular
desktop computer using the monitor, mouse, and keyboard, or can turn it
into a dedicated home theater with a TV (plus remote).
The last phrase does not parse easily. At first read, there is ambiguity
regarding the subject of the last "can turn" and the "it". I guess
that the intended meaning is "Freevo can turn your desktop computer",
but at a first read it also sounds as "Freevo can turn your keyboard"
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Anyway, my proposal for boilerplate is now:
Freevo is a complete home theater framework. It can operate as a
Personal Video Recorder system for saving television input to disk, but
it can also browse and play pictures, music, games, and movies either
from the hard disk or from CDs and DVDs. Freevo can be used on a
regular desktop computer using the monitor, the mouse and keyboard.
Freevo can also be the central software in a dedicated home theater
to be enjoyed with a TV (and a remote).
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