Re: Bookworm press release, please review and translate.
Donald Norwood wrote:
> We would very much appreciate reviews and translations for the work which is
> available here:
A couple of lines I'm not sure about:
<p>Debian 12 <q>bookworm</q> ships with several desktop applications and
environments. Amongst others it includes the desktop environments:
</p>
"Several desktop applications"? I've got several desktop applications
open right now. Is it trying to say something like "several desktop
environments each providing a full suite of applications"?
Also:
<p>This release contains over <b>11,089</b> new packages for a total count of <b>64,419</b>
packages, along with a significant reduction of over <b>6,296</b> packages which
were marked as <q>obsolete</q> and removed. <b>43,254</b> packages were updated in
this release.
It contains packages along with a reduction? I'd suggest:
<p>This release contains over <b>11,089</b> new packages for a total count of <b>64,419</b>
packages, while over <b>6,296</b> packages have been removed as obsolete. <b>43,254</b>
packages were updated in this release.
--
JBR with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian
sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package
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