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Re: DPN 03/2012 frozen. Please review and translate.



Hi,

Francesca Ciceri <madamezou@debian.org> wrote:
> we just finished the last bits of DPN for the latest issue of the Debian
> Project News to be released Monday. We would appreciate reviews and
> translations.

Some suggestions attached.

Holger

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--- dpn_3-12_orig.wml	2012-02-04 20:40:11.326123825 +0100
+++ dpn_3-12_workingcopy.wml	2012-02-04 21:06:00.533133591 +0100
@@ -38,7 +38,7 @@
 Team, becoming Release Assistant: congratulations Cyril!
 </p>
 
-<toc-add-entry name="bitspiuparts">Bits from the piuparts maintainers</a>
+<toc-add-entry name="bitspiuparts">Bits from the piuparts maintainers</toc-add-entry>
 
 <p>
 Holger Levsen sent some <a
@@ -90,7 +90,7 @@
 to generate system objects in the LDAP database. After a few modifications of
 the configuration from a GUI, the network of computers is ready to use.
 <br />
-A third beta version of Debian Edu based on <q>Squeeze</q> and containing this tool as just been released.
+A third beta version of Debian Edu based on <q>Squeeze</q> and containing this tool has just been released.
 </p>
 
 <toc-add-entry name="questions">Answering Debian users' questions</toc-add-entry>
@@ -191,10 +191,10 @@
 <p>
 Micheal Gilbert wrote an <a
 href="https://lwn.net/Articles/477062/";>article on a recent
-security flaw (<a
+security flaw</a> (<a
 href="http://security-tracker.debian.org/tracker/CVE-2012-0064";>\
 CVE-2012-0064</a>) and how it was handled by
-distributions</a>. Thanks also to the detailed
+distributions. Thanks also to the detailed
 research by the discoverer of the issue, Debian reacted really
 fast and the issue was already fixed in Debian unstable less than six
 hours after the disclosure.
@@ -252,9 +252,9 @@
 
 <p>Do you want to organise a Debian booth or a Debian install party?
 Are you aware of other upcoming Debian related events?
-Have you delivered a Debian talk that you want to link it on our
+Have you delivered a Debian talk that you want to link on our
 <a href="$(HOME)/events/talks">talks page</a>? 
-Send an email to the <a href="mailto:events@debian.org";>Debian Events Team</a>.
+Send an e-mail to the <a href="mailto:events@debian.org";>Debian Events Team</a>.
 </p>
 
 <toc-add-entry name="newcontributors">New Debian Contributors</toc-add-entry>
@@ -325,7 +325,7 @@
 <p>
 1008 packages were added to the unstable Debian archive
 recently. <a href="http://packages.debian.org/unstable/main/newpkg";>Among
-many others</a> are:</p>
+many others</a> these are:</p>
 
 <ul>
 <li><a href="http://packages.debian.org/unstable/main/clinica";>clinica &mdash; simple medical records manager</a></li>

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