Re: new draft release announcement
Hamish Moffatt wrote:
> Hmm, OK. It sounds weird to me. "is upgraded" - when?
In woody.
> Speaking of the passive voice, a grammar checker tool[1] picks you
> up on: "Upgrades to Debian GNU/Linux 3.0 from earlier releases are
> automatically handled by the apt package management tool." It suggests
> "The apt package management tool automatically handles upgrades ..."
The problem with rewording that in that way is that the paragraph is
designed to be noticed by someone who has a debian system and wants to
upgrade it; starting the paragraph with a technical term may cause a
skimmer to skip over it. I've tried to make it ameanable to skimming,
since many people surely will.
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