On Fri, 8 Jul 2011 11:53:14 +0100, Justin B Rye <jbr@edlug.org.uk> wrote: > On Fri, Jul 08, 2011 at 11:38:53AM +0200, Francesca Ciceri wrote: > > http://anonscm.debian.org/viewvc/publicity/announcements/en/2011/2011-07-12-debianday.wml?revision=2373&view=markup I'd suggest the following changes: =-=-=-=- --- 2011-07-12-debianday.wml (revision 2377) +++ 2011-07-12-debianday.wml (working copy) @@ -2,7 +2,7 @@ # $Id$ # $Rev$ -<define-tag pagetitle>Debian invites you at Debian Day</define-tag> +<define-tag pagetitle>Debian invites you to Debian Day</define-tag> <define-tag release_date>2011-07-12</define-tag> #use wml::debian::news @@ -13,7 +13,7 @@ Banja Luka, Republic of Srpska, Bosnia and Herzegovina as the first day of the annual Debian Conference.</p> -<p>During Debian Day, the conference opens its door to anyone interested +<p>During Debian Day, the conference opens its doors to anyone interested in finding out more about Debian and Free Software, inviting enthusiasts, users, and developers to a full day of talks on several subjects - such as Free Software in government; design and Free Software; and Free Software advocacy - @@ -33,7 +33,7 @@ Jesus Climent</li> <li><q>Austrian e-health system</q> by Gerfried Fuchs</li> -<p>The Debian Day is free of charge and open for everybody interested in +<p>Debian Day is free of charge and open for everybody interested in Free Software. More information about it, and a complete schedule, can be found at <a href="http://www.debianday.org";>http://www.debianday.org</a>.</p> =-=-=-=- or, perhaps, if you prefer these instead: =-=-=-=- --- 2011-07-12-debianday.wml (revision 2377) +++ 2011-07-12-debianday.wml (working copy) @@ -2,7 +2,7 @@ # $Id$ # $Rev$ -<define-tag pagetitle>Debian invites you at Debian Day</define-tag> +<define-tag pagetitle>Debian invites you to Debian Day</define-tag> <define-tag release_date>2011-07-12</define-tag> #use wml::debian::news @@ -13,16 +13,15 @@ Banja Luka, Republic of Srpska, Bosnia and Herzegovina as the first day of the annual Debian Conference.</p> -<p>During Debian Day, the conference opens its door to anyone interested +<p>During Debian Day, the conference will open its doors to anyone interested in finding out more about Debian and Free Software, inviting enthusiasts, -users, and developers to a full day of talks on several subjects - such as Free +users, and developers to a full day of talks on various subjects, including: Free Software in government; design and Free Software; and Free Software advocacy - as well as a string of talks about the Debian project and operating system.</p> -<p>After the <q>Debian Day opening plenary</q> during which Adnan Hodzic -will welcome attendees, the following talks will be delivered (among -others):</p> +<p>After the <q>Debian Day opening plenary</q>, during which Adnan Hodzic +will welcome attendees, the talks that follow will include:</p> <ul> <li><q>Understanding Debian</q>, by Bdale Garbee</li> @@ -33,7 +32,7 @@ Jesus Climent</li> <li><q>Austrian e-health system</q> by Gerfried Fuchs</li> -<p>The Debian Day is free of charge and open for everybody interested in +<p>Debian Day is free of charge and open for everybody interested in Free Software. More information about it, and a complete schedule, can be found at <a href="http://www.debianday.org";>http://www.debianday.org</a>.</p> =-=-=-=- HTH Cheers, Phil. -- |)| Philip Hands [+44 (0)20 8530 9560] http://www.hands.com/ |-| HANDS.COM Ltd. http://www.uk.debian.org/ |(| 10 Onslow Gardens, South Woodford, London E18 1NE ENGLAND
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