Re: [DRAFT FOR REVIEW] Steve McIntyre elected Debian Project Leader 2008
On Sun, Apr 13, 2008 at 06:59:10PM -0300, Andre Felipe Machado spake thus:
> Hello,
> Please review the draft [0] before April 14th, 17:00 GMT.
> regards.
> Andre Felipe
>
> [0] http://times.debian.net/1232
"The Debian Project Leader 2008 election is another confirmation of
the suitability of the framework to the Project objectives, defined
by the Debian Social Contract , the Debian Constitution, and one of
the reasons why its developers are so commited."
^^^^^^^^
s/commited/committed/
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Maybe split the following sentence into two. Orig:
"The Debian Project governance system evolution was carefully
studied by Siobhán O'Mahony, Assistant Professor at the University
of California's Graduate School of Management, and Fabrizio Ferraro,
General Management Professor at IESE, and you can read more about
it, with link to the complete scientific study with detailed data at
this page."
Suggestion:
"The evolution of the Debian Project's system of governance was
studied by Siobhán O'Mahony, Assistant Professor at the University
of California's Graduate School of Management, and Fabrizio Ferraro,
General Management Professor at IESE. You can read more about it at
this page, which includes a link to the complete scientific study
with detailed data."
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