Re: latest version of Debian LJ ad is ready
On Thu, 2 Jul 1998 treacy@debian.org wrote:
> Fredrik Ax wrote:
>
> > "Do you want an easy to install
> > and use, highly upgradable
> > Linux distribution? Visit
> > http://www.debian.org/
> > for your one-stop solution
> > to secure and stable Linux
> > workstations and servers.
> >
> > Debian - Get it today!"
> >
> I find the first part a bit choppy.
> Also, having the 'http://www.debian.org/' in a different
> font and color breaks up the 2 halves of the text
> so both pieces of text should stand on their own. How about:
>
> Do you want an easy to install,
> easy to use, highly upgradable
> Linux distribution?
> http://www.debian.org/
> Your one-stop solution
> to secure and stable Linux
> workstations and servers.
>
> Debian - Get it today!"
Much better "flow" in the text than in my propsal!
I think we should sign off this column as written above!
/Fredrik Ax
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