Re: Bookworm press release, please review and translate.

[Justin B Rye <justin.byam.rye@gmail.com>]

Donald Norwood wrote:
> We would very much appreciate reviews and translations for the work which is
> available here:

A couple of lines I'm not sure about:

  <p>Debian 12 <q>bookworm</q> ships with several desktop applications and
  environments. Amongst others it includes the desktop environments:
  </p>

"Several desktop applications"?  I've got several desktop applications
open right now.  Is it trying to say something like "several desktop
environments each providing a full suite of applications"?

Also:

  <p>This release contains over <b>11,089</b> new packages for a total count of <b>64,419</b>
  packages, along with a significant reduction of over <b>6,296</b> packages which
  were marked as <q>obsolete</q> and removed. <b>43,254</b> packages were updated in
  this release.
                                                       
It contains packages along with a reduction?  I'd suggest:

  <p>This release contains over <b>11,089</b> new packages for a total count of <b>64,419</b>
  packages, while over <b>6,296</b> packages have been removed as obsolete. <b>43,254</b>
  packages were updated in this release.

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JBR	with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian
	sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package